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I was still on my way to lunch when I must have chosen the wrong corner to turn. As soon as I did I was knocked backwards by a boy ...

Hey there, I have to agree, I don't really get it... Though it does seem slightly like an extasy trip... Perhaps you could add an extra note on the end ...

*Sighs due to silly internet and rewrites critique* hey there I think this needs stanzas, and maybe a few lines lengthened. I ended up reading it in a big paragraph, ...

I really like this, and I can see how taking out the 'three steps ahead' would mean it doesn't make sense. It is rather long, do you have an abridged ...

I love the overall theme of this. Nice work. Hmm... Constructive criticism... But it's a great poem :p I'll try my best. If anything I'd have to say that some ...

This is pretty awesome. The overall meaning is a bit hazy, but I got the impression it's about moving from somewhere nice to somewhere not-so-nice, and watching how it affected ...

This isn't really my kind of poem, but I think it's brilliant anyway. I love your use of imagery, and I quite like the way you've switched meaning through stanzas. ...

Hey there, welcome to YWS. First things first, you probably haven't noticed the rule. You have to do two critiques before you post, and try to keep the review / ...

I was about to head off for something to eat when I noticed a man a little way down the street, talking to what seemed like a lampost. I walked ...

I sat next to the fountain in the flower garden, a light spray of icy water falling onto my bare arms and shoulders. Hundreds of people passed along the outer ...

Hey there I love this poem, it's different from a lot of others. I agree that you've done a lot of telling and not showing, but you've pulled it off ...

Hey there Welcome to yws! Nice work, I like it. You've brought the characters to life really well for such a short piece, and their relationship is well defined. You've ...

Umm... can I be a home-schooled teenager living on the campus due to a parent being a teacher or something. I really don't like writing from an older person's point ...

As the fights grew ever more vicious I shifted to sit on the floor and cross my legs. Not to sound like a wimp, but these guys where not normal! ...

Hey dude You owe YWS four critiques for the two poems you've posted. Also, this made me laugh. I'm not entirely sure if it was meant to be humerous or ...