Tadatori53

Okay, these are a few questions that I want reviewsers to answer (please): 1) Is the way I did the personification fit well? 2) Did know from the context right ...

I will answer your questions! 1. Did it catch your attention? Very much so! I don't show it alot but I really do like fairy tales and I always wondered ...

This is a very mind spinning story! It could just see this if it was on a screen flashing back a forth (I don't know why...) When I read it ...

I would love to be able to think as freely as this! To be able to dance with statues downtown...if only, if only... This really has emotion in it, I ...

Oh! I haven't read this before now! I really liked it! I don't really see any errors that haven't already been mentioned... Well, there's that part in the end... "Slowly ...

I really like this one! It just seems to be such a real experiance! It's kinda scary when you realize some of these thoughts are thoughts of your own, though... ...

Let's see...all the errors here have already been found so...you know I love this! I know you're continueing so I can't hardly wait for more! Whenever a story is a ...

I am first able to see when my eye’s cap is removed. This is, of course, after I’ve been woken up by a button being pushed. I look around and ...

I really liked it! I do agree with some of the comments already about the childs voice. Children the age of five don't know some of the words you used ...

Chapter 2: μυστικός (Secret) part 3 I sat up and turned toward Brandon to make sure he wasn’t hurt and to help if I could. I was certified in first-aid, ...

Wow. I really really liked this. "Try walking in her shoes for a day" is one of my favorite phrases and this is what that phrase really means! It's wonderful! ...

After I roared (comma not needed) I charged the two half dragons. The shorter one flung himself at me, but I knocked him off to the side and tackled the ...

It looks like most of the grammar problems were found already but I did just want to mention one thing. The first sentence is not a complete sentence so maybe ...

"Cold fear pain. These were all the feelings that rushed through my body as I crashed head first into the sea of daggers. The icy water filled my lungs, as ...

[pre]part 2 “Oh,” his voice let out softly, almost inaudible as we reached the classroom. “Interesting.” “Is that it?” I asked, expecting more for a complete answer than the incomplete ...