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thank you for the reviews! The change of tense in the middle is for the reason of a kind of flashback! I looked in my grammar book and it said ...

Please see that either character could be either gender and their relationship could be anything, really. So please tell me what you thought the each were and what their relationship ...

A/N: This is my third short story I've ever written. I don't really know how good it is but it's a really random idea of mine. I hope you enjoy ...

Xena, I don't think you really have an open mind at all. This is an AMAZING ABSTRACT! You really need to just let it flow in your mind, not questioning ...

Wow! Very interesting story! I won't do the nit-picks 'cause I'm really not that great at it. But very interesting story! It is full of mystery and great futuristic scifi! ...

thank you, griffinkeeper! Very much appriciated!

I won't do the grammar because it seems to have already been done and I'm not that good at grammar myself... so... 1) Characters James- Is amazing. Good personality. I ...

I agree with Emma! This is really good! I really really liked it! I don't know why more people aren't reading it! Grace is a really neat charcter and I ...

Hm. Cool idea! This is very interesting! A 'little' problem. haha I don't know where this is set at but around here no one kisses at three haha Okay. Well. ...

Wow, I really loved this! I enjoy writing through the perspective on an inanimate object so it's great for me to read something like this! :) I liked how you ...

I double posted this so I'm bringing a comment from the other one here so I can delete that one! From syte: "Quote: she asked simply, keeping her chocolate eyes ...

thanks for the comments! Pinata, you'll see later on how it's more action :) the mind thing and diamante are the only Scifi... that's why I put it in the ...

Prologue People say things change over time. Any species develop different habits, personalities, and instincts to be able to live with their surrounding environment. This applies to the human race ...

thanks so much for the advice and helping me with ideas! I'll change the title, I promise but I think I need help with ideas! If you have any ideas ...

Thanks so much! It really helped! I revised it and even changed the burglary into a hostage! Again, thanks!