TabbyGirl

Hmm... interesting. Well, I liked how you opened it, and I liked the general tone of the story, and how you described Alice and Riley... that was all good. But, ...

Well, this sounds interesting, but it does move quite fast... slow it down a bit. Even though he does resist the girl with the pink hair somewhat, I think the ...

This story sounds pretty cool... but, some parts could use improvement... I have two twin sisters, Marygold and Callie, ages 13. When I first read this I thought you meant ...

I really liked this! I can totally see what was happening... Although, the very begining I don't really get... maybe instead of putting it I open my eyes slowly, very ...

I liked the begining... that line about smiles blossoming or whatever? That I really enjoyed. Great imagery. However... then the flow gets a bit rocky. I like the story... but, ...

Well... that was kind of depressing... Heheh, but still, the writing was good. Great first paragraph, it really got me interested. The children go to their nursery. There’s two of ...

The writing is really great... I could feel Michael's impatience, almost like I was there. However... I have to admit that I'm hopelessly confused as far as what exactly happened. ...

This is a short story I wrote... it takes some imagination to understand what's going on... and I know it still needs revision, so, I'd like you all to help ...

(Hi! I'm new here) Dude, this is pretty intense. I mean, like, I can totally see what she's going through, and although it isn't exactly a story yet, it's good. ...

Hi! My name is TabbyGirl. I'm fourteen and I've been writing since I was eleven... mostly I'll set off to write some fantastic novel but end up with just three ...