TNOandXadric

Thanks guys. I'll definitely work on the dialogue. :)

Thanks, Loose, that's very very helpful. :)

Well, unfortunately for you that's all I have so far so you'll have to wait a bit. And thank you, you're very kind. As to the Silvertongue bit, well, I've ...

Very much an improvement on the original story. She still whines but at least it's done comically. Also- Utensil! I love it.

Oh, my. That was wonderful. You not only managed to capture Bella Sue and Eddiekins perfectly, but you got the author right as well. As such, I present you with ...