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It's UK v US usage. Is it? I'm from the U.S. and I think the -t looks much more... right than the -ed.

I have always loved fantasy, and science fiction to a lesser extent (though I absolutely adore steampunk). I didn't really start reading until I was about eight and discovered the ...

Do not have action for the sake of action. Do not have cliffhangers without purpose and plot. Chapters are meant to divide POV and scenes, not to serve only as ...

I really don't care for Complete Monsters who do evil for the sake of being evil. It's been done, it's boring, and the stupidity inherent in such villains infuriates me ...

Thanks guys. I'll definitely work on the dialogue. :)

Critique away. * Chapter One It rains. This is not, strictly speaking, the truth. Yes, there are thick storm clouds overhead, and water is indeed falling from the sky. There, ...

Once again: The way you portray the warm climate to cold climate change is perfect, right down to the natives wearing shorts. You win cookies. Also again: You're still over-using ...

Firstly: I love your portrayal of Cali's newly relocated to colder climes. And hating snow. It's fun to mock people of this sort. Secondly: You may want to cut down ...

This day is a day i have prayed never to come. Dark clouds fill the sky making it at noon as black as midnight. The great world cities twist together ...

Thanks, Loose, that's very very helpful. :)

Do you like to handwrite things or type them? Both, although my handwriting is atrocious. Most of the time, I'll handwrite, then type and revise onto my iPod, then email ...

You infodumped quite a bit, about the New Year, the immortals and their purpose, Blood moon, the seal, Artemis and his origins, the narrator's family... None of it was necessary ...

Well, unfortunately for you that's all I have so far so you'll have to wait a bit. And thank you, you're very kind. As to the Silvertongue bit, well, I've ...

Well, I admit I'm a bit nervous. Heh. Anyway, this is the latest Shiny New Idea. By all means rip it apart. :) Faro sat in the back of the ...

Well, it's interesting. The dialogue was a bit stiff and awkward in places, and the characters could definitely use some fleshing out. There wasn't much of an emotional connection with ...