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Re: Arabella (For now)-Prologue
you are right. it is too short. it was not enough to satisfy my curiosity. the post leaves alot of unanswered questions and that is a good thing. questions keep ...
Dec 6, 2009 -
Re: Hatred of an Angel: Prologue and First Encounter (chapter 1)
i loved the prologue. it kept me guessing the whole time. the part where the neighbors "decided to sing carols for us" is kind of confusing. was it around christmas? ...
Dec 6, 2009 -
Re: Blood River
i was a little confused at the beginning. are there people talking about the movie, or if not, i am confused at the random outbursts in the scene. the story ...
Dec 6, 2009 -
Re: unknown name chapter 1 part I first draft
sounds captivating. i can not wait until you write more. i love how you start off the story with the sense of impending danger. i would love to here more ...
Dec 6, 2009 -
Re: Prologue..tell me does this captivate you?
it was very mysterious and makes me want to read more. why does she have to keep it a secret? does she have epilepsy or can she walk into people's ...
Dec 6, 2009 -
Re: A New Hop in Clyss - Chapter One
i absolutely loved that it was science-fiction. the details were so descriptive that i felt that i was actually there. the beginning caught my attention and was written brilliantly. i ...
Dec 6, 2009 -
Re: The School (no better title yet)
Prologue: My head still swam from the car accident that happened only moments ago. The accident didn't make any sense. There weren't any cars on the road and the car ...
Oct 13, 2009 -
Re: The Janitors -Chap1/Part 1: An Attack-
i had originally read chapter two first, but now as i read the first chapter a lot of the things came together that i couldn't piece together in the second ...
Oct 13, 2009 -
Re: The Janitors -Chapter 2 (Trash)
I truly enjoyed reading every bit of this chapter. It kept me interested through and through. halfway through the chapter i realized that it was chapter two and not one, ...
Oct 13, 2009 -
Re: Firecrow
sounds like a really great beginning for a story, book, novel, or whatever you want to turn this work into. it needs a little work in the communications department. some ...
Oct 13, 2009 -
Re: What He Came For (chapter one)
"What is his name?" I shouted out into the silent crowd. I looked from face to face, and whenever I met their eyes they looked down not totally ashamed of ...
Oct 7, 2009 -
Re: Ballad of the Blood (2)
it sounded very interesting. near the very beginning where you said that it would be confusing, i have a question. it talked about the man running through this forest but ...
Oct 7, 2009 -
Re: Fighting Fire (Prologue, and Chapters 1, 2) (just added 2)
its absolutley awesome! it kept me interested from the begining and makes me crave more. what happens next? i wasn't board at all, and there were no dead spots. the ...
Oct 2, 2009 -
Re: Behind The Looking Glass: The Awakening (Chapter 1)
sounds like its going to be a great story. it flows very well and readers like that. they like action and emotion and anything that makes them itch to know ...
Oct 2, 2009 -
Re: Nero's Dream
beautiful piece of work. you have a future in writing. :D
Oct 2, 2009
