TNCowgirl

Wow, nice, it was well written and I could visulize the what he was doing. But one thing, what kind of instrument????????? I didn't really see anything gramatically wrong, course ...

Please don't hate me but you wanted me to be honest, and out of all honesty it doesn't flow. I like the main idea of it, but it doesn't flow. ...

It is a little choppy, I liked it to a point. It is more like a telling story, someone said that already though so I am trying to think of ...

Hey write more, I think there is good discribtion and such. It is really good. It really made me visulize (Sp) everything which is a big thing for me. I ...