TNCowgirl

So I'm not any good at criting, but from a readers stand point this looks really good. I can't wait for more to get posted!!!!!!

Senna had had her laugh, she walked out to the mud and walked out towards the messenger. The fox ran off not liking be close to all those people. "Now, ...

"Ok, whatever we do we better do it quickly, I know of a place." She thought if she should take then to the safe house. It was up in the ...

((OK, so they don't run into the candle wax :D))

Trent stood in front of Celenia as Fren's Sire barged in. "What gives you the right to come in here like that?" Trent demanded, "Where's Crag." Sire hissed, "Who?" Trent ...

Trent kept close to both girls to keep either from getting hostal. Celina was on edge from the killing of her Sire, and Crag would be on edge because of ...

Ara took off at a dead run towards Silvin's voice her sword out but kept to her side. She heard Gered and Nate behind her, but she was a faster ...

((Go right ahead))

"I don't think we're heading anywhere, maybe circles, but no tunnel goes this far." Trixie said, "Why don't we walk, leave something here, and if we run into it we ...

Senna stared at the ice, she stroked Seline's head absent mindly. "How...how did you do that?" She asked, "I know majic, but..." She couldn't believe it, majic was supposed to ...

Senna stood up and walked towards the enterence. She saw a boy looking down at a peice of paper and she kept her eyes away from looking at his eyes. ...

*Ahh, wait where does Alana go????**

Senna heard noise, she took off at a full run and almost ran into two people, a boy and a girl. She could smell death. She pushed past them and ...

Senna looked them over, "Well, it seems this has become a very popular spot." She said looking around, she didn't like all the people, one was a vampire. SHe could ...

((Silvin isn't with the group any more y'all.))