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*I'm bored, so she is going to make it hard. :P* Angel: "Are you trying to make things worse? Huh?" She demanded. "Stop lying and LEAVE!" She climbed up the ...

Tim: "No, but you keep glancing at the door. You are trying to find a way out of here, without me stopping you." He shrugged. "Won't do you a lick ...

Tim: Tim looked at the werewolf and sat down on a chair backwards. He crossed his arms over the top. "Don't even think about it." He said smiling a little. ...

Could, not coulud. :P It was good. Good detail. Could've added a little more. But it was good. Keep going and tell me when you do if you are adding ...

Velna: Velna shrugged, "The matter of where someone's affections might lie." She replied. "A simple enough opinion that caused a little more reaction then planned." She looked up at Chris. ...

Angel: Angel didn't look at him, she watched as the werewolf tried to get out and Tim jumped up running after her. The blue ball looked bout ready to attack ...

Velna--- "I just gave them my opinion on things." She smiled. "They did what they wanted with it." She continued to scrub pushing a strand of hair from her face. ...

Angel: Angel yanked her hand away. He was just saying that so she could help him get away. More tears rolled down her face and she pushed them away with ...

Other then what everyone else already pointed out. You also need to capatilize letters after a period. And when in dialoge after someone finishes a sentence put a period, not ...

Come on you really need to put more. I'm bored to death here and there aren't any other things to crit. :'(. Please Please Please post more. *Mods, if you ...

Alright, I know I said I wouldn't do this again. But I like this pic. :D :P

Carmen: Carmen smiled as Ryan started past. "How bout you sit and eat?" She said smiling up at him. "Just for a few minutes."

Tim: "That's why your not leaving or shifting til it heals." He replied. "And no arguement. Wolves heal fast." Angel: Tears rolled down her face as she watched Travis try ...

Tim: Tim walked into the kitchen and picked up Angel. "Guess you forgot she doesn't fully operate after she wakes up. I thought all fairys were like that." He said ...

Angel: Angel rubbed her eyes. "Oh. Want something to eat?" She yawned still trying to wake up. This was probably a dream anyways. She pushed some food towards him and ...