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Tim: Tim smiled and nodded. "Ya," He led her back inside. "But you need to sit down, wolf or not wolf, no one can stay standign after losing that much ...

Colt: Colt groaned inwardly again as she moved closer. "I don't know, most people just think I'm out for one thing." He winced inwardly. "I'm not, I guess I'm just ...

Tim: Tim licked the blood from his teeth and off his lips. "Ya, though I dont agree that you should've let me do that." He said softly. "Though I'm not ...

Colt: Colt's sense errupted as she kissed him. He pulled her closer and pushed into the kiss. A slow song came on and he slowly moved their bodies together. "Why ...

Tim: Tim's eyes floated to her exposed neck and his sense peeked up. "Just stop me when you need." He whispered his teeth slidding out of his gums. He wasn't ...

BETTER!!! I really liked it. Didn't find anything else to tell you to change. One thing. What does ostentatious mean??? But other then that this was really good. Keep going. ...

Colt: Colt groaned inwardly as he felt her body mold against his own. "I love you." She smiled. "N-Now what did I tell you about that?" He teased moving around ...

Colt: Colt watched her as her body moved smoothly with the music. Her belly piercing glittered making his eyes move down her body. Maybe this wasn't such a great idea! ...

Colt: Colt smiled. "Alright, but before I teach you anything, we're gonna see how you dance." He smiled pulling her towards the closest club. "Come on, it will be a ...

It is still really long. BUT I can give you a tip that you can go ahead and implament, I think that is the right word, though spelled wrong. This ...

Tim: Tim swallowed, she wasn't making it any easier. "Can't, I promised Angel I wouldn't fed around her." he said. He ran a hand through his hair as his teeth ...

Colt: "You didn't do anything wrong other then looking amazing." He smiled hoping to make her eyes turn from sad to happy again. He kissed her softly, wrong thing to ...

Alana: Alana ran after the others keeping up with them. As they got closer they stopped. "I'll go up front." She said looking at them. Tegan started foreward again and ...

Um, you need to reformat. Put a empty line between every paragraph, after you do that and make it easier on the eyes I will read through it. Pm me ...

Colt: Colt swallowed hard. She was really not helping. "I'm perfectly fine." He smiled not daring to kiss her. "Let's go, we're wasting time." He teased. "Oh, what book was ...