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Re: Innocence
Flowers: First off these look very soft and calming. but it lookes to me that you smudged? I'm just gonna go with thats correct. As a fellow artist here's some ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Even in Rain
I love this. I've actually seen a hoodie like this and I want it so bad. I think what would imporve this would be more shading on the legs and ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Pinch Me Chpt. Three
Okay...umm....I am still COMPLETLEY lost. I know I probably sound like a broken record but you keep jumping from one setting and scene of the story to, it seems like, ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Pinch Me Chpt. Two
The content in this chapter is awesome! But the transition from the last chapter to this really quirks me. Also her sister seems almost bi-polar. You describe her as happy ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Pinch Me Chpt. One
The start is really good! Your characters are really easy to get into quickly, which is sometimes hard to do, so KUDOS for that! I think it begins in a ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Visions
Preface: The days were getting darker earlier now. I had to hurry. I saw The Clock fast food restaurant down the road and sped up some. I looked over to ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: The Grim-Keeper [2]
Hey! i must say, this had a sad little ending! But its not the ending! wootwoot! haha. First off I have to say, how you described your surroundings was amazing! ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: Blue ~Prologue and Chapter 1
Hey! I just read your chapter and firstly thought there is so much potential in this novella just waiting to be accessed! This was a very short chapter and it ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: The Grim-Keeper [Prologue/1]
Work with me here, I'm still a new-new person! I really liked this chapter, there is a bunch of books out there like this but this one didnt feel the ...
May 19, 2011 -
Re: Holding On To Nothing: Prologue
This has SOOO much emotion in every word, i can almost hear the anguish in her voice, amazing tone! There were a few things i didn't like, she kinda sounds ...
May 19, 2011 -
Re: Ashen Chapter 3
-Fira- I am really getting tired of these stupid dreams. This one wasn’t as scary as the other ones but just as creepy. I was in a room it was ...
May 19, 2011 -
Re: Pace - 1
OH my gosh! I love this story, its exactly what my head dialogue sounds like on a daily basis. There wasnt much that i didnt like about this story, its ...
May 18, 2011 -
Re: Ashen Chapter 2
-Fira- I woke with cold sweat; I couldn’t believe that Natalie would kill me. ‘It was just a dream,’ I kept telling my self, but I still couldn’t get over ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: The Almost But Not Quite Suicidal Cherry Sucker
OMJ. This was such a heart wrenching story. I liked how you didnt stray off topic when there were so many opportunity to and how you connected the title and ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: She Knows Him
This is amazing! it sounds like shes thinking about him and then it just hits her that she cant have him! So heartbroken! The only thing i dont like is ...
May 16, 2011
