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Re: Abortion
Did you hear the news? It’s the latest craze among youths at the moment. It’s called abortion, and it is making a real killing at the hospital for those doctors ...
Sep 18, 2011 -
Re: The Ghost I Hear
There is room for improvement, but this is still an interesting read. Your first poem, eh? This is a good start, and you have the right to be proud of ...
Aug 15, 2011 -
Re: Safe (Part 3)
A current of electricity shocks me. A painful, painful, painful as all fuck shock. A short shock, yes, but a short and painful shock on my chest that felt like ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: A Forgiveness Song
A FORGIVENESS SONG W&M: Timothy David Mitchell Verse: I can not imagine what it felt to hang upon the tree and suffer for me I can not imagine all the ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Dear Christie
Maimoona, that was simply beautiful. The entire piece is written with such emotion. I got confused at the beginning about why the dad was writing and thought it was just ...
Aug 6, 2011 -
Re: Safe (Part 2)
It’s strange, really. You hear about and know what sex is when you’re a virgin, but when you actually do it, it gives a whole new meaning to the word. ...
Aug 6, 2011 -
Re: Sparks - Chapter 1
Wow, this is exciting! You certainly do have the gift at grabbing one’s attention, that’s for sure. It seems a bit of a mixture of Harry Potter and The Bourne ...
Aug 1, 2011 -
Re: The Hunter of Nightingale
This is quite an impressive script, and I can see how this would work as a film. The main thing I would really criticise on would be to put more ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: The aftershock
This is indeed a beautiful and sad piece of writing. You certainly have done a fantastic job at putting together a poem that certainly captures the emotion of someone who ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: [[[ Delete ]]]
A cleverly constructed piece. You have really put a lot of emotion and though into this. The one thing I got a tad confused about was the gender of your ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: Last World- Chapter 1 Draft
I couldn’t agree more with what Arspoetica has just said. Your set-up in the first part of the chapter was very good. And I too am pretty interested to see ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: Safe (Part 1)
THIS SHORT STORY AROSE FROM A WRITING EXERCISE TOPIC GIVEN TO ME BY A FRIEND (see below) IMAGINE THAT TWO PEOPLE ARE TRAPPED OVERNITE IN A SAFE. ITS A LARGE ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: Be Still, My Heart
BE STILL, MY HEART W&M: Timothy David Mitchell Based on Psalm 46. Be still, my heart Come and see what He’s done Come, see what God has done Be still, ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Actors (scenes 31-40)
[continued from part 3] I know that people don’t like reading long pieces on here, so I am only going to post 10 scenes at a time on here. I ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: Sue The World
SUE THE WORLD W&M: Timothy David Mitchell Looking at you; grin on your face, What you hiding now? You have a way, you have a plan, Scheme of grand design. ...
Apr 16, 2011
