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Name: Hannix Race: Breton Age: 28 Gender: Male Birthsign : Atronach Skills: (choose 7) : Destruction, Restoration,Alchemy, Mysticism, Conjuration, Illusion, Alteration Atributes: (choose 2) : Intellig

The fingerprints had worked. Gordon had tried to get him to try something a little more practical, but he'd liked his own idea better, which entailed him literally stealing Jones' ...

and the world spun around him as [s]and[/s] he fell, face-first, into the mud. 'Arghhh!!!' He groaned, wiping the mud off his face with his sleeve, which was already torn, ...

the skunk and his crew have been sailing nowhere and everywhere and back for some 300 odd years Nowhere and everywhere? What's this supposed to mean? Just say everywhere. Something ...

I’m scared to death, but still ex c ited. I look at the rest of the pack, who all seem as excited as I am . All off a sudden ...

Proth Samuel was at the bar that night, to celebrate his entry into the King's Elite Battalion. "So, Proth, who's the commander of the battalion?" one of his friends asked. ...

But other times... well it's living hell - literally. I think. I live in Hell. But it is not what most people think it is . I t is simply ...

The above-mentioned advice is good. Split some of your paragraphs, and try a little more showing and less telling. They had developed a writing and learning system that they used ...

[/quote]They are dark, dirty, and angry. Puckered and broken and used. Revealed, like this, in the eyes of a scrounger, in the vomit of a drunk, it becomes even more ...

I enjoyed reading this story, it seems well thought out, and it's entertaining. I didn't really spot any flaws, except maybe this one: No implants were needed for that. I ...

Name: Proth Samuel Age: 24 Race: Human Appearance: Blonde hair. Muscular stature Country: Galian Personality: Stern and serious. He's very loyal to his country History: Proth Samuel joined the army ...

I like the ending. It kind of reminds me of Resident Evil, but it's probably different. Your writing is good, so I would continue if I were you. I thought ...

It's a good introduction. You've piqued my interest.

Yeah, the ending got a little abstract. I didn't completely follow it at the end. Perhaps if I think about it a little I'll understand. Anyway, I was very intrigued ...

(I hadn't written in a long time, and I decided to use one of my old ideas. I usually do a lot of planning and thinking. But when I think ...