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The guard carried the struggling girl up the stairs and placed her on top of a barrel. Propping her up, the guard shoved her head through the noose and checked ...

Very different way of describing parents. Its true that parents are supposed to be saviours and role models but they don't desire to be it. Brill vocab. Loved it. Charlotte

Rain is an over used topic but you made this unique. I love it and the imagery is very good. But change this bit: there're droplets on my roof. To ...

I love it! Brilliant word choice and you tackle this subject well! The first two stanza were great but the poem did go on a little bit so maybe you ...

Hi kristina/ Max. I agree with the others. it has potential for a great poem but we need a little more information. But don't give it all away. Not that ...

Wow. That was deep (I think) I had to read it twice to understand what you were talking about but like I said wow. I love this part: Through my ...

7/10 its quite nice picture but not as good as the lotr spoofs avatars. bring them back!

7/10 its quite nice picture but not as good as the lotr spoofs avatars. bring them back!

Has anyone got any more ideas?

Thank you, that has been a lot of help. I think I will go with number two. Shadow twit, thanks so much for all the correcting you did! Charlotte

Ok, this isn't a whole story yet. But I've got a character Ellima and I have way too many different plots anmd stories about her. Can anyone help me chose ...

Piano, haunting, broken playing,reading, loving Fingers stroke the keys Freedom Clarinet, Intricate, difficult sighing, blowing, listening A rage to master, Obsession War Battle, crusade fighting, sta

I love the first stanza and the last. Really powerful poem but maybe it needs more punctuation (?) Sorry I can't be more helpful. Charlotte

WOW! I love the last line. So.... brilliant. I loved it. I can't think of a single thing to improve it. Charlotte

aaah!You remind me of my brother ConorR, he's on this site too. I think it is hillarious and don't worry, we all get a horrid review from Brad (shudders) sometime ...