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Oh!!!!! I love it! Wonderful rhythm, lovely choice of words and enchanting story! loved the ending! Charlotte

You sound funny. Not in a bad way Imean like good funny. Your English is fine but I see what you mean about the bracket thing. I laughed when I ...

is this supposed to be about cutting? What's cutting? I thought it was about you murdering someone or something. But It was good. You kept me gripped as I was ...

i'm a little confused as too what this poem was about but i liked it. My favourite line was: I couldn’t use you just to be on the shelf I ...

A little cliched but I like the concept. (Not that I know much about poems.) It is a good idea. So just add some description (show don't tell) and make ...

That was wow! I loved the repitition and the line about the infantile mind. I really felt for this person and it was a shock when I realised she/he was ...

Definetly change the title but I like it! Add a couple more stanzas/ verses and make the lines more punchy and you have a great poem. (not that is isn't ...

Yeah it is quirky. I liked it. I needs more imagery and a bit more detail. Why does she want to be a poet? How does she become on? etc. ...

Thank you so so so so much! That was really helpful! Thanks Kitty 15 for being wonderful and fomatting it for me! Charlotte

Thanks! But i still have no ideea how to format it. i am terrible at paragraphs! if someone could show me it would be great! charlotte

Welcome! This is the best site ever so you should have fun here! (as well as learning things) PM me if you have any problems or questions or you just ...

Were you writing simply to make it seem as is the narrator was young or mad or not very educated? He/her tone was sort of like a child. V.good. But ...

That was hillarious! Just some of the stuff the dragon said was hard to read! And Spider pig rules! Charlotte

Thank you everyone especially Pushca for the very informative review. That will help me a lot. Thanks again! Charlotte

“Now, my children, you must open your minds to the other side. Let the spirits enter! Cast out thy thoughts and take in the spirits of the past!’’ Mystic May ...