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You know I loved you, [s]You[/s](Put 'I' in instead) know you loved me too. But that can't change the things between us, no. And now it's time to let go. ...

To say, "Someday I will change the world" Who are you to believe? But who are you to disagree? [s]The sky is blue. The grass is green.[/s] Find the light ...

I despise you. I authorized you. You compared me. Please, spare me? Take off that mask. I will not tell. Since I was polite, I do not Change this to ...

It nice and surprisinly dark. I like the first piece of imagery but the last stanza confused me. It was quite good but it did seem like prose not poetry. ...

If I could make the world as beautiful as you, I'd write the whole world over, Make the skies a bluer blue. I love this part! There would be no ...

play on daughter of the moonlight play through the night play on your gleaming white piano unblemished, unstained, uncorrupted pure and clean, unlike you. Play until your fingers can play ...

No way is it lame! It was a tiny tiny bit cliched but I liked the cuteness! ~Charlotte~

Its ok.

It was funny but a little creepy. I'm never eating Mcdonalds again! (Thats a lie, i can't resist fries and milkshake!) ~Charlotte~

It was pretty good but just a few things to do: 1) Why is it called heartbeat? Maybe add something in to do with it? 2) Describe more of what ...

I liked this poem but I think it needs more. maybe more to do with the title ceasing souls? A few more stanzas and it will be much better!

I liked the first line but I think you should change line 4. It was cute and imaginative. I adore it! Charlotte

Cool! The poem does show passion for cars /driving and I can picture everything you say. I love this part: Life seems so clear, in that rear view mirror Good ...

Nice, flowing, gentle poem! I like it! Charlotte

Beautiful. This might just be my favourite poem. Please write more stanzas! I adore the rhythm and language! Keep writing! Charlotte