Swottielottie

It wasn't my kind of poem, but it was good if you're american or something. I didn't like that line either and some bits of it were cliched like the ...

I liked it but I don't know why it was called fickle maybe you could show that more or maybe its just me. Good work! charlotte

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Him I stare. (where are you staring from?) His hair like night, (hair like night? I'd like to see that) His smile too b

I bet you would but its good that you think about these sort of things, it means your curious which means your clever. (well, that's what I say anyways) Charlotte

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RE stands for Religious Education, Don't you have one?

Empress Charlotte the Portable of Londinium-le-Thames (And the funny thing is i live in london!)

*Applauds* Much better Iquippie! I like the way you gave your views on God at the end, it was quite interesting. (Will definetly need to show my R.E teacher.) I ...

I got confused after the first four lines. Did the cloud kill him? Why? What were his flaws? Take save ferris' advice and do it subtly. What did you mean ...

They shred and tear, at the hearts of the illiterate. Breath stinking, Eyes shining. Pointed teeth gleaming. They tarnish and feather, The reputation of the fool. Fangs bared, Claws ready. ...

It was very short but I think that was what made it so good. I think I got the hidden message but i'm not so sure. I don't think you ...

Thank you! I may edit this someday but I wrote this a very long time ago. Thanks for the comments! Charlotte

A New Me Is this what, I really want? A new life? (why is it a new life? Are you moving?) A new me? (what whould change) If that’s what ...

The start was very gripping! It was quite funny although I don't know if you intended that. The ending confused me. What on earth did she mean bye this?: "Because ...

A flame of desire burns within me, to touch your delicate skin. To feel your warm breath. You drive me insane, with all your love talks But are you real? ...