Swires

One: Legends of Old Have you ever stopped to wonder why things are the way they are? For instance, why is the sky blue, why is life life? And what ...

I liked it very much, I loved reading it and the plot was excellent, personally i find it more believable than the bible, as that is also a fictional book. ...

OR how about, from a fantasy point of view. THe Mafia discovers magic!

Im goign to agree with Jiggy here, you need to demonstrate a characters ability through actual action. IE - A character called bob who is thick but quick. Bob sliced ...

This chapter is a very disscussy one, giving the reader the information. It was, however interesting and you didnt murder the story by having no action. I really liked the ...

Chapter 3 – Magery Fyrne stood in a circle of fellow mages, looking up at the older men and then down at his 15 year old hands. They bore looks ...

Yes Davids right, they dont pronounce Hs

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Very funny. its necessary not necesary Never Eat Cakes Eat Salmon Sandwiches And Remain Young. Good job!

Yes, Rebelle is right, it sounds much better even though it isnt grammatically sound.

Ill do chapter one tomorrow when I have a spare moment

LOL! I know the feeling

Thanks for the feedback.

The Beginning A boy and a girl walked down a dusty road, the two were lost in their own thoughts – thinking about the long days ahead. Behind them the ...

Thankyou for the critque, this was written before I discovered plotting so the whole thing is a little lopsided. :) I may come back to this soon and edit it ...