Swires

Short. Why bother posting it? Please actually shell out a meaty piece before bringing it for the slaughter.

Ok, what does everyone think about splitting up this to slow the story down a bit: 1 scene getting into Nurse and the world, ending with the introduction of a ...

I do not think I get enough reviews, some of my story's get none at all. However since I simplified my writing I have received an increase in reviews.

Yule - because none of our family are Christians. Yule came before Christmas, and, even though I'm not a pagan, I like the word Yule more and it's more historically ...

Quiet filled the room, the house, the earth. Then came the real noise: Silence. No birds dared to chirp or, no mammal dared to suckle its young. All things came ...

"A dragon, then I could get my own way all the time." - The Nurse. "An owl, then wisdom is mine." - The Judge. If your name was Bridey Kidd, ...

Ive just copied all 12 000 words into word and I aim to do a mega crit over Christmas of this because I promised Id do it then forgot about ...

Other crits are welcomed by anyone else who wishes to read this.....

Thankyou bubble wrapped. This story is pretty much a nice little toy I want to play with. I want to cut a town off from outside interference and watch them ...

Please don't post a paragraph again, fantasy fiction critters want meat to get there teeth stuck into which can be a short story or chapters from a working novel. Why ...

I found this piece to go on a bit like "she did this then she did that" - there was little variety in sentence structure. You can combat this using ...

Ill give a Q - What are your thoughts on global warming?

Thank you dream deep. Yes my characterization of the nurse sucks. I felt a little objective writing her, maybe its because I don't often write in the view point of ...

Ive tried to calm down purple prose in this one by getting rid of rambling imagery. Its quite simplistic and if you dont think it is then say. Im not ...

I'm not, I'm wallowing in self pity lol!