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Silver Ferride 1964 / London / Trafalgar Square Everyone remembers where they were when the American Empire declared war on the United British Colonies in 1962 , Sandly Limerick mused. ...

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The technicalities are in most need of development ::He was elected as the Supreme Judge of London in the primitive seventeenth century This would mean he was elected judge in ...

Underlines are my comments. Emboldened words are my suggested changes. [s]Strikes are words you should get rid of.[/s] Crouching atop one of the spires of a great cathedral I surveyed ...

There a better authors on YWS than Paolini, and this extract proves it. Why not just read LOTR twice and have done with it, because thats what Mister P has ...

Ok, this looks like a Prologue to me. It was beautifully written, Sonnestein had a clear voice, and - great name by the way :). I really like your personal ...

I stood on the cliff, drenching wet, waiting for dawn to come. The sun, coward that he was, wouldn't show his face. The syntax has already been picked upon. Its ...

I agree. The story is only as good as its writer. Any idea can be taken, yes even cliches and crafted into something original and refreshing. I'm going to use ...

Title: Clasir's Engine Genre: Literary Fiction Summery: When Ross Brian, a weird little boy finds his Lego creation smashed he thumps his sister, the culprit and runs to the bathroom ...

[size=large] xx.I wandered lonely as a cloud;; [/size] Clasir's Engine My current baby. Not sure if it will be a novella/novel/short just yet I'm taking it as it comes. Its ...

I disagree about splitting this into two. Chapters can contain many, many scenes. YOu have two scenes in this chapter - there is nothing wrong with that. They would be ...

Ok, most writers know that one of the most prominent authors of modern novels, Stephen King does not plot. He compares a story to excavating a fossil and that using ...

Orwell wrote "Animal Farm", not "Animal House" lol. Btw... Orwell wasn't a communist, I think you should know by both his books that he was critical of communist societies yet ...

>> Ok, some nice improvements to Elayna, much more poetic and descriptive. SHe is now more credible as a character. However - not sure aboutt he credibility of a Finch ...

Like many great books Orwell's style was a little draggy and fat. However the story as a piece of speculative fiction was nothing short of a masterpiece.