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Well it depends on the importance of the sword, is it vital that you have to describe the sword in detail? If its a simple sword then just say exactly ...

Ok, heres a bit of macro photography that me and my friend did whence we doth bored one afternoon. They are taken around a farm hedgerow in the English midlands. ...

The pier is my favourite, again Ill reiterate that the angle is wonderful and the lighting is excellent. However I also liked the meaning behind the candles, I thought that ...

Im hooked like a fish out of water. I found this a fresh read from my dwellings in the fantasy well, I rarely explore the Other forum but when I ...

I thought it was pretty good. It wasn't bad but there is a lot of work to do. I understand what Imp, Snoink and Brad are saying here, it seems ...

I found the style simple and easy to follow. However you say "Steven" far to many times, we know who the scene is about so "He" will do just fine. ...

I like the basic idea of what you're doing here and parts of it are very well written, but there are some things I would change. You basically run through ...

I love them. Well done Kay.

Im not going to add salt to the wound by reiterating what the others have said although I agree with it. I would recommend buying a poetry anthology or book ...

Id say this needed an R rating. Ok, This was an intrguing story, it got better as it went on. However I felt the first two paragraphs seemed a little ...

Ok, Ill write a story about an interesting character with no conflict. Lets see how far you get into it before you wish I was never born to write such ...

Well if it was only a beginning I still would critiscise it. The "Phonecall from girl friend" idea is very very cliche. I also think it is a very bland ...

Nice advice

Nice advice there.

Ok, the witches promise seems alot like the unbreakable vow from Harry Potter and thus will be deemed cliche by many readers. I only had time to read half of ...