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bob addressed pretty much every issue that any poet has ever had in the history of yws, but i have to say that when i read this, i thought it ...

A weapon, like no other, has been formed from my soul. The last line here seems cluttered. It may be better as -formed from my soul It speaks of who ...

A little random and it didnt really have any meaning to it.

Well everything has pretty much been said. Personal Opinion: It seemed too tolkienesk - I couldn't be bothered to read it all. The beginning could be reconstructed to go straight ...

As soon as I saw those present tense verbs I came to the reply box. Ill do the old bookshop test. GO into a book show with 2 baskets - ...

Ok, the first major problem is the beginning, you write a blabbery useless introduction. Go straight into the main characters actions. Then the second major problem: Girl who is depressed ...

No, story line is way too cliche. Eragon has taken the dragon line by storm and no one can get a novel in edgeways with it.

Wow! Way to go! And that helps in what way? Please think about your reviews before you post them. :x

Little point in this post - mods delete.

Grave Yards ( As they are called more popularly in England) are an abundance of information and interesting historical figures, I could spend all day in one finding my ancestors ...

PM me if you need a critique and Ill add it to my long long list of things to critique. Welcome to YWS and enjoy your stay.

Hello there, I am also a mentor so if you have any problems feel free to PM me also! :)

I read the first one and read half of the second one, forgot about it, reread to where I was, forgot about it etc... I just couldnt finish it, it ...

Lawrence Ferlinghetti!!!!!!!!!! He's incredible. Amazing. I'm in love with his words. And Allen Ginsberg is pretty wonderful too. Two Scavengers in a Truck, Two Beautiful People in a Mercedes is ...

In this context - weather to portray emotion. For example in films they have happy scenes on a bright sunny day and dark, murder scenes in the night time even ...