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Mmm.. This isnt as good as your others, I didnt really see any meaning behind it and it was perhaps too short to captivate me. I thought this one was ...

What is faith? Is it what we see, know, hear, feel, or believe? I like the one word lines here but I arnt sure if the commas are necessary, it ...

Im not a Haiku fan as it is and these just reiterate my dislike. They dont really make sense and are rather vague in the sense that some lines are ...

YAY - Me is fifth!

Im also available for any problems you may have. If you write Fantasy then just PM me and Ill come and leave some feedback on your work. Enjoy it here.

Hi there and welcome to YWS, enjoy your stay and remember that critiquing other peoples work is helpful.

Ill be normal: Hi :)

As far as I know every single member on YWS is an amateur in the sense that they don't write for money.... Yes we do have some excellent critiques - ...

Hi there. You can learn more from reading and reviewing other's work. So go into what you like to read and start reviewing some work.

Sorry, Ive just picked up on something. You arnt legally aloud to be on this forum if you are any less in age than 13 in accordance with COPPA protection ...

Format into paragraphs, proofread then I shall return.

I suggest you read out this aloud in order to correct mistakes. And also - why a paragraph? It is impossible to get any sort of essence of character or ...

sorry, I need to rephrase. A story, by my own definition is a tale of what has happened in the past and the writer is retelling it. Thus, it would ...

Yes, Example 2 is a modern piece of mine, It was a little back history in story form, I am still playing around with characters for my newest project.

Im just going to disagree slightly. -Don't start your sentences with 'but'. Why not? Example 1 Running through the tunnels, Derren brandished his torch-light and used a little magic to ...