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Welcome, what do you like to write?

Hi there Kayla, we have a new edition to Fantasy writers, excellent. Im a hard core fantasy writer :) If you need any help dont hesitate to PM me with ...

Yes, Paolini is quite boring.

No, the mods will move this to another one when they see it. Non-Fiction is about real life. Like If I wrote an article on smoking it would be here. ...

FORMATTING FORMATTING FORMATTING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

hello. You should check out other peoples work before posting. Reviewing others work is very helpful as you can see where they fall down and apply your treatment for it ...

... Are you sure this is non-fiction? You may want to critique others work and get a feel of YWS before posting your own work.

The last one lacked focus yet - a little cropping wouldn't go amiss I don't think!

I think that is the new version - Which I have to say is much better than this utter crap you first posted.

Phorcys wrote:Then you review it before posting. Simple. No excuses please lol Ooo... we really have a strict teacher here,lol. :wink: lol- Ani - do not interrupt me when I ...

I think Eleinasari caught everything. Yes - This should be rated to PG-13 I think. This read very much like "I was, I was, I was" Avoid verb forms of ...

I was kinda rushed when I made it, thank you for the feedback! Then you review it before posting. Simple. No excuses please lol :D

Why Thank you ANI

You may want to add some formatting in order to gain more critiques. THe more user friendly a story is the more users you have. Simple.

Once upon a time, there was a very, very confused princess, who could never make up her mind. Whether it was deciding to have roast duck or stuffed goose, or ...