Swires

// well, it doesn't affect me since I don't live in the UK and am already over 18. However, if one or both of those were different I might be ...

Yes, birds have hollow bones, human bones arnt hollow because evolution and adaptation dictates that we need stronger bones to survive.

Bond....

looks good, reads better!

Basically if your work contains sex or violence then rate it R to be safe. Although I cannot find a guide explaining the ratings...

Chad looked around nervously. Still groggy from the sedative, he blinked and looked around to get his bearings. You've told us he looked around twice here. Repetition is boring in ...

Im not familier with these - we do Heaney and Clarke.

It seemed a little forced rhyming... I don't know what I'm talking about lol ... it and spirit are half-rhymes really. I just arnt sure, it just seemed a little ...

mmm... I think you have fallen into "Poet's Pit". Sacrificing meaning of the poem just for the rhyme scheme. You don't have to have rhyming poetry, take the rhyme out ...

A nice poem, i arnt too sure of its meaning or purpose but I thought it was well constructed. I liked the last line as much as the rest of ...

Thanks everyone for the critiques. I shall whip up the grammar point everyone pointed out and update it. I think theres one thing I need to justify: his hands looked ...

Well it was just my opinion - I didn't expect it to lead to a war lol. (sounds like iraq all over again). Prokayote - Feel free to disagree with ...

Ok, this is the first part of Derren's story. I am having different stories of the characters and tying them together at the end of the middle or at the ...

Power shook him, he was magical. Ok - Im terrible at these lol :)

Example: There was an old man from cheadle, Who slid through the eye of a needle, They thought he was cute, When he tooted his flute, But many thought it ...