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Officer 5th Class Lind Striker braced his rifle and let loose a volley of semi-automatic fire into the incoming ‘Sucker swarm. The 77-SABER kicked like the horses back home at ...

Alternative to constant updates is just keep this thread in your favourites and change the corrections en mass - a daunting task.

Ok, sorry my other post didnt praise this. I finished it and I liked it - weird plot is good. Nice ending and I can see this leading into an ...

No, you didn't take my "describe through character" advice. THere is a huge prelude of description that is seriously clogging up the story. Its strange, outlands just isn't like this, ...

Not really original, you have just substituted boy and wolf...

This discussion is interesting, I too know little about this. However Id say that the only time hed know he was a suspect when he gets arrested, although US and ...

Yeah, this is a nice little article.

That eraser does look artistic.

... Ok, thats nice, Anything else we should know about you?

Nice idea, I recently posted an update in randomness and wanted to find some sort of achievement/update forum etc.. Good job.

Ok, I havnt read it all - no point in lying. The beginning was very uninteresting - you describe the place very objectively. A beginning should start in action or ...

Thank you. I know what you mean about Derren - hes sort of trapped in a crypt sulking bitterly. Maybe I could add sympathy their, OR add a flashback/past chapter ...

YAY - Im so Happy, I have reached my goal for 10k beginning, lead in to my new novel Scall's Magic. I arnt bored with the plot, I love my ...

... What is the motive for destroying Green? Nice, wacky little piece. but I dont get it lol.

Cool - you still have a way to go. I look foward to reading some of your shorts and the start of your book. Its not often we get scifi ...