Swires

HI there, feel free to PM me with any questions or problems. Also, just a quick reminder - you may want to review a few pieces of work before you ...

Anyone else _ I really need comments on this.

No, thankfully, Bush cannot stay in office. It wont be Clinton, America haven't had a woman president yet and I don't think you are liberal enough to have one in ...

Thankyou for all the praise.

No it isn't Daniel. Its coloured squiggles in the vague shape of a boy. To be honest, I hate it and don't class this as art of any kind.

Theres one in Canavans book. "I love father," she blurted. // Where did she blurt? I so wanted to put an "out" at the end.

I never thought of Umbridge, she is a super villain yes.

Something, shimmering brightly, streaked through the air with a whoosh and just barely grazed her cheek. She screamed. I dislike this, it seems cluttered: forcing too much information into a ...

Ok, skimming through the beginning you make a classic mistake in my book. You start with a description. Setting is good but it really doesnt grab a reader into a ...

Thanks for the comment Adam, much appreciated.

Keep writing, if you dont write you wont increase your skill in the art.

My ideas of where I am going come to me when I am curled up in bed, reading. I usually write ideas on paper book marks lol.

Dont worry. You will get accepted soon enough.

Awesome, I see you have been sucessful thus far.

Wow, you have a busy writing future. Theres nothing nicer than seeing your story in a magasine (well I assume there isnt, I have never been sucessful).