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Wow - SUperstar incan. Love the structure, the whole regular and change to more lines to add power to the final verse. The imagery is nice in the first and ...

In love poems rhyme is allowed in my book because it makes it that little bit "cuter" and adds a flavour of passion.

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Well he wouldnt post it if he didnt do it lol. Yeah its really good art.

Nice link Claudette. Staring- I recommend getting your hands on a Poetry Anthology of some kind, read some Heaney.

Thanks for the comments Claud.

"A simple Doctor in the lore of Magic" - Rosin To air is human, to forgive divine. How far do you agree with the above?

Space out paragraphs - you will get more reviews this way.

"No, not really" - Derren What is the meaning of life?

Something was not right. From the moment Margo woke that morning an incessant nagging, a fly in the back of her mind, reminded her of the queerness of it, and ...

If I was too write a critique I would be just reitterating Sams and CL's points in different words. In terms of story: 1) Your style is dandy, I like ...

I think Claudette got most things. I love this poem, its really powerful. The rhyming of last lines just "works" Put Claudettes suggestions into practice and we have a nice ...

Get some flow into this poem so the reader can read it nicely without having to stop at harsh words.

Im loving the couplet structure, it makes it feel fluffy but the content is spooky - quite a juxtaposition.

"kread is my alter ego, even though this thought is but a fracture of my heart for it is but a trifle of my common demon hood" - Scall. Question: ...