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Ravenclaw symbol is an eagle, not a Raven. Thanks for the comments. Btw - Leonheart on here thought of the plot with me for this, I just typed it up.

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There is a skill involved in capturing animals that close up, and a great safety risk. If Id have held any longer on some of those I would have been ...

Wow - the rhyme was beautiful and the ending was simply shocking! THis line: And want our young bodies to meet. Seemed odd and a little unflowing. Great poem

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I saw your user name, clicked the story and began to read. I was a little disapointed. I see where you were going, you tried to get a casual voice ...

Lol - why are we even debating this lol?

Im against this sort of "talentless art" its just a splatter. Its nothing more, artists are over analytical and you create a sense of meaning around the meaningless. No, I ...

I like the first one, I dont know what the hell is happening with the second one, the third one is also good. nice work.

The dark room was weakly lit by a dwindled fire. Cumbersome adverb "weakly" remove. There is no such thing as a dwindled fire, "dwindling fire" is the correct terminology you ...

Bestia prowled through the forest, his eyes shut tight, his hands touching the floor, feeling the way. Too many commas. "Bestia prowled through the forest, his eyes shut tight, hands ...

A long poem. I thought it was more of a story though. I dont think you have hit the nail on the head here, I didnt like it. It was ...

Cadmium may have said these, I didnt read his review. 1) Why the italics a the bottom?? THey add nothing to the poem 2) The imagery was good. 3) I ...

There wasnt really a pattern here, I wasnt a great fan of it. But if you are a beginner, as Claudette said: the subject/theme is good. Beginners, Including myself usually ...