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Thanks for the comment, I may return to Scall's magic some day and carve it into a Novella - 30k maybe. Clean it up and cut out a load of ...

Wormwood - GP Taylor (and what a drag it is) Harry potter DH Reread. Age of Five, voice of the Gods - Trudi Canavan

Thank you for the insightful critique CCF. Ill take your points on board. Thankyou for your comments JCobsessed even though I do not agree that in such a short piece ...

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I agree with the grade given. Ok there are some flaws in the story, plenty of grammatical errors. There is little suspense, little build up. THe main problem here is ...

Ok guys, you have been really helpful and a few characters are bubbling away in my mind now. I think before I was trying to have the "good" character when ...

Firstly, this kept my attention. It was interesting, very nice stylistically and the characters were satisfactory. There is one major flaw in this: the pace. We have been overwhelmed by ...

Thank you everyone for your insightful comments. I'm so glad I have finally written a piece that isn't bin worthy.

Thanks for the advice, keep it comin' YWS :) Elelel - I've never looked at it like that lol. I suppose evil is subjective. This is interesting, one shall muse ...

Maybe the problem is that my main characters are bad characters? Then maybe I need tips on how to define a unique character. My main characters usually want a silly ...

Hello there. I can give you several writing remedies to this: Remedy 1: Read urban fantasy's, they are mainly Young Adults. The Power of Five by Antony Horowitz, Harry Potter ...

The marbles rolled and clicked against each other as Jerry pulled open the drawer. Come on, lets get read of that nasty little word that obliterates fiction: as. Its boring. ...

Ok, some points and remedies as thats what my critique style seems to be now: :arrow: Enjoyable story, I read it to the end. Howerver - why is half of ...

I'm not sure if the others have picked up on these but i'll stop by and add a few points. :arrow: You introduce a character and describe every part of ...

Hello there. The main problem here, before the story can even be taken into consideration is your grammar. :arrow: Capitalising words is taboo in creative writing. As always, certain authors ...