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Granted but it never stops and you are killed when one hits you on the conk. I wish that I could live in a perfect world!

I must admit the story, well if thats what it is, is rather short. Usual short stories are int eh range of 500 to 2000 words. Try adding more description ...

I hate new labour really Labour Policy one: Do everything america tells us two Labour Policy two: We dont care what millions dont want, well do it anyway. (Fox Hunting ...

I AM ENGLISH Yes I totally agree with you on this one. In my ENGLISH lesson the other day our teacher asked us what our nationality was, I was the ...

I like it, all accept the last line, just didnt work for me. Sorry for being so briedf but yes, enjoyable read, be even better in song. Nice work.

The Boatman - I need some title suggestions Chapter 1: The Boatman The bay was only visible through a fracture of light that escaped through the billowing purple clouds, its ...

I like the action but there could be so much more description to compliement the action. Sense appeal, what can the characters smell, taste, see , hear. How do they ...

I dont know, what does what is mean?

I sent one to myself for me in 2036. I hope the net is still functional then lol!

MMmmm. USA and Britain attacks Iraq because of nuclear weapons. France have them and are threatening to use them, no one attacks. Yeah thats fair!!!

I love your work but you would have much more room to manouver in another program. I recomment Coral Painter. That is an art program and has many types of ...

I have a friend who creates wicked art in MS Paint, how ever I arnt a fan of the program, its too limited for my liking. I love your ork ...

First of all is there any need for a prologue, id just call it "chapter 1" all this prologue nonsense just seems pointless, writers these days only seem to be ...

Yeah It seemed a little unrealistic and some bits were confusing however I liked some of the action you wrote, with a little work it could be a much better ...

I like the story and the opening paragraphs description is absolutley fantastic. However I felt for some time it was "Mirianda did this then she did that" perhaps a little ...