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Chapter Two The Cabbie and the Cartographer Maver took a seat at the round table in the cellar of a derelict public house. The large meeting room was illuminated by ...

She can make another few million out of an encyclopaedia though lol.

I suppose they do subconsciously. Everything I see would inspire me somewhat. However I believe fiction is probably the biggest inspiration.

JC - Shes making an encyclopedia that will answer any loose ends.... The last line was tacky. I hated it. Although as for the epilogue I fail to see how ...

And will Pikara soon become part of this conflict? Naughty. I cringed when I saw this - its too telly. How about we scrap the question entirely and have it ...

A few points when I was reading: :arrow: The girl doesn't get a name right away and I think this is why parts are deemed "telling" instead of showing by ...

The line-by-line crits have already been done so I'll give you some generic feedback as a reader rather than an editor. Your descriptions are the strong point of the Prologue. ...

5000 words of Silver Ferride done. Hoorah for battle scenes!

Thanks guys, Im glad you like it. MM - They are out of chronological order because they reveal tiny pieces of information gradually. If id have done them in chronological ...

Great mod Nate!

Congratulations. If you squint you can see the name "Phorcys" burnt out on the end there. Alas... a reminder of what could have been. Best of luck, seeing as I ...

Thanks for the critique. Sandley Limerick never had a scene with the Thing... that was Robert Dawson, the major shareholder of Prime and Dawson Limited? I agree, there was no ...

Thanks Trident, I hope I actually stick with this to the end. Im approaching this chapter by chapter seeing as they are larger - like Ill ask myself "What is ...

Silver Ferride: 3000 words :)

Internet Explorer is the only one I know how to work.... lol. If you can use explorer, firefox is no problem. :)