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Right, Ethnicity and Nationality are two different things. Nationality is the place of birth HOWEVER if you are born on a British ship but the ship was made in Germany ...

I am back after a few months of inactivity!

LOL! I have to say this is great satire.

[Hells Tools is part of a new trilogy I am writing called "Daggered Heart", Vericon city slums are based on the Victorian London slums. Crits welcome] PROLOGUE Vericon City was ...

I feel your pain, there is no good links for arabic surnames on google, I was also going to use some for my middle east type city in one of ...

I like this story muchily! :P Although I do agree with what Snoink's saying --> A mysterious character does seem loads cooler. There's nothing wrong with switching characters - or ...

The fog streamed into the Thames, the glowing of the dock lanterns were filtered through the fog’s meshwork and in turn, the water seemed yellow. The banks were chiselled hard ...

Write a story surrounding the picture, about the picture, or with the picture in the story.

CS Lewis and JK Rowling.

I also want some tips on how to avoid confusion.

"Rise and shine!" Nice starting line, abrupt dialogue and immeadiate action. There was no response. The brown haired boy wrinkled his nose and tapped his foot. “Rise and shine!” he ...

I didnt recieve anything however she must be destroyed, I HATE spammers, maybe some program automatically submitted PMs to people.

Yes this seems very narrative and there is no emotion, imagery or description of action, perhaps work on that and resumbit, there doesnt seem to be POV really and it ...

Please add some text formatting to space out your paragraphs and I will review your work.

Right this was ok, I didnt feel dragged into the piece really, also I felt it needs maybe more sensory description and imagery.