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I dont really understand the use of it either.

This may work for all the plot driven/world driven writers more effectively that people who are great at inventing characters. I basically, have a standard excersise book, on the front ...

So do you want the whole story critted from your first post to the end?

Great tip fishr!

I felt this was crafted well in the way that it includes all the information about Michelangelo. However I felt the opening was poor: James Lander woke up sleepy one ...

Yes lol! Rum is supposed to be an utter annoyance. Yes a semi-colon would go better there but I have a tendancy not to use them to spite MS Word ...

Part 2: Masus, forgetting about the days wounds found strength, a new courage that could stare death in the face and command it with the lifting of a finger. He ...

Thankyou Kay, Ill be extending this when the time comes to include it in my main draft, I agree with everything you said, it is a little rushed at the ...

Masus fell to the ground causing bruises to bubble on his greasy skin. The jeers of laughing children howled over him as feet forwarded and added to the mass of ...

[Right i quickly did this in Notepad so excuse the spelling errors etc... Its a character sketch for a character that I havn't really thought about and he is fairly ...

Possibley that may be the way to go. What sort of word count are these mags looking for. My short stories tend to drift into longer ones.

LOL! Park Lane is the dark blue, the penultimate street to Mayfair.

Claire Patterson has had a bad memory of when she was a young girl. Good, Blurbs always introduce the MC in the first sentence. Her sister, Joy, and her were ...

I dont really think this should be a prologue, as someone on Squills said, prologues should give a past background to a story, the main character should be introduced in ...

LOL! It is a pathetic poem, I am more of a short story/novelist