SwallowedByInsanity

Walking through the streets, watching strangers do their job. Some are laughing out loud, some are handicapped; and others are buried in blindness. I don't think the word 'some' was ...

Although this may be a work in progress, the pieces are already looking great! You just need to polish off those sharp edges and piece together the various sections. As ...

Wow. I loved this! Not many people post lyrics on here, and yours were presented beautifully. I could hear the melody in my head, which is definitely what every songwriter ...

This poem was beautiful, I loved every line! I could see no awkward phrasing and it had a flow that made me want to sing it like a pop song ...

I liked this poem, it had a lot of hidden meaning behind it whether you intended for that or not. the last line is quite as powerful to the reader ...

I am a bloody, blackened, beaten angel With nothing left but tattered wings and a broken halo I love you use of alliteration with 'bloody, blackened, and beaten', but I ...

The idea was interesting, and had potential to be great, but I feel like your words were awkward and the lines didn't quite flow together. I'd advise you to... for ...

For someone who's new at this, you clearly show potential! I love how throughout the poem, though it was short, you were not at all repetitive. My only advice would ...

Like candy floss in my mouth, My youth waters with delight To the sound of yellow trucks Overwhelming sand pits with construction . That part was a bit awkwardly stated. ...

Although it appears to be a quick poem you conjured up in a few minutes, the flow is still incredible. I can't really picture the waves as they are in ...

I haven't conformed to the chains of rhyme in awhile... so this should be interesting. Under My Skin Sitting on the surface is a girl who wears a smile. Her ...

For someone with writer's block, this poem really wasn't all that horrible. It did not contain any grammatical flaws, and there's nothing I can see that could be changed with ...

Thank you Silver for the great feedback, your review was very detailed and gave me the kind of editing I'd been hoping for (: The other students at my school ...

Seeing as I was recently broken up with, stuff like this really speaks to me, and I can tell you wrote this from the darkest sectors of your heart, and ...

it's short and confusing and I am very very lost. It's well written, and detailed and the vocabulary usage is wonderful I just... have no idea what's going on in ...