SwallowedByInsanity

Heya (: I'm going to try out a different form of editing today, instead of posting pieces of your poem and then following that up with editing comments, I'm just ...

Everything written from the heart is worth something, remember that! Because it was written in a time of desperation and darkness, it means something and things from the heart can't ...

Hey there! :D insanity here lol. I'd like to start off by letting you know that because you chose such a common topic of poetry, it's very difficult to write ...

Is my imagination the only friend that will love me when I'm gone? I just wanted to mention that since you said 'when i'm gone', you might consider changing 'love' ...

I actually really liked this, and the repetition of "Mitch" worked well (: If I could do things over, Mitch I swear to God I would But time travel's impossible, ...

I'm very sorry to inform you that the only way to earn points, or 'tokens' as you've referred to them as, is to review other people's work. The site was ...

Your loving words, Coated with care and the scent of sincerity Are empty beneath their attractive packaging. Hiding under a thick layer of make-up Resides the most hideous face You ...

I wrote this about a year or 2 ago, and decided it could use some help possibly maybe. So critiques are welcome (: this poem tis' where I got my ...

Wow! Really something worth reading, I could hear the lyrics being sung in my head, they had a real rhythm to them. The doctors, they give me pills, They give ...

I really liked this, I could here the music in my head (I write sheet music as well haha, I'm a pianist) and it was very lovely. I could picture ...

You say they’re dark and ugly, Black marbles in your eyes. I say they're light and lovely, Bright as the midnight sky. You say you’re unlovable, Born to be hated. ...

Wow so simple, yet it contains so much feeling in such little words! I've strived for this before and it's something that should be admired when achieved (: Kudos to ...

Circle down from the dark sky of night. "dark sky of night" sounds a little strange. Each flake as beautiful as a springtime flower Maybe, "Equivalent to the beauty of" ...

ooooo! I like this, especially the way it's written like a schedule from day to day. On Tuesday you hovered around close. Gave me a smile. Even said "Hello." Hello ...

This sounds sort of like something a group of kids might chant, like the 'the bears are out tonight' rhyme. I rather liked it really, and it has sort of ...