Suzuhara

Hey Fawkes! Thanks for the review. I'm glad you like it. I'll see what I can do about Zackaria's character. Thanks again.

Hey Pringle! Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it. I actually have a new chapter one and forgot to update this, but I still appreciate the fact that ...

Thanks for your suggestions Serendipity! It's a 13 syllable poem, but I'll cut it up to make it flow better. I also replaced the cliche line. Thanks!

Thank you Thevoiceinside and Ariana! Yeah, this poem reflects how I feel about loneliness since I'm feeling it right now. Thanks for the encouragment as well Voice! Thanks for your ...

Thank you Threnody! I'll be sure to use your suggestions as I think they help. Thanks again! Suzu

*crosses fingers* I hope this version is better. :twisted: BRAND NEW CHAPTER ONE!!!

It ravages my chest, taking its fill of my heart I cry for it to stop, but destruction is its art. Broken and shattered with not one help in my ...

Thanks! I'm sorry. I shouldn't have posted this. It's a segment in the middle of my book.

Vicuna sat agitated as her long black vehicle hovered noiselessly in the night. It drove through an expansive private land with manicured grass and wide-trunk trees spaced in perfect arrays ...

The slums lined her path. Ramshackle structures that consisted of sheets of corrugated metal stacked atop each other at awkward angles, and behind them the old brick buildings, each threatening ...

This silence is incredible. I can't believe such silence can exist with everything that is going on. But I suppose that all of Manhattan and all of the world is ...

A friend from the writer's digest forum told me about it and I signed up!

Thank for the welcome Tatra! I'm grateful for the list of authors you gave me because I plan to go the library later today so I'll be sure to check ...

Thank you for the welcome Jasmine! Yep, I'm from Massachusetts. I've lived here all my life, but now I'm thinking about going to Japan to do a teach exchange program. ...

That's fine about the simplistic voice just as long as you change it along with the character as his complexity grows. Reading it over again, I didn't think it was ...