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This is related to another project I'm working on, but GUHHH. This was not as profound as I hoped it to be and it really needs some work. I'd also ...

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Done! Thanks for posting Gryph. n_n

I almost feel that it would look better with horizontal width rather than vertical, just because the emphasis is cluttered and there is no movement. There's just the stagnation 'round ...

Done!

I just mean the explanation is not believable. You don't see kids being named after "Han Solo" just because the parents like Star Wars. (At least not enough it make ...

Before I start, are your characters actually Japanese? If no, despite the provided explanation of parents loving manga, it's not really believable. No one gives their anglo children Japanese names, ...

Hello! I've got a hankering for some delicious prose, so let's help each other out! XD FYI: Only post one piece/chapter at a time (exception- poem collections) For a novel/novella, ...

Icy , silver glitter of frost, I'm not sure this is the best, or strongest, line to begin with. They fall and (cut 'they') cover us as we walk, They ...

I agree with LastPaladin. There's something very off-putting about your wording, and how you mix technical terms with softer things. (ex: "a light source glows from behind a veil of ...

Another day has come Has gone. I'm not sure about how you're punctuating this. If you keep the first lines as a punctuated sentence I would add a comma after ...

I was cleaning out the margin-tripe in journal, and I figured I might as well fix some of it up. XD Most of these are half-thoughts that I'm trying to ...

Hey Kat! Thanks for the review! I actually had very specific intent with the piece as far as a message. And it's very simple. XD The first stanza refers to ...

Ahhh, cool! I do mostly a combination of science fiction and fantasy, and realistic fiction.

Hello, Chris! It's good to have you here. I definitely know what you mean! The writing group at my school has three people, including me. =_=; I love Steinbeck too! ...