SunshineOrange

This is good, although I'm not a major fan of depressing poetry. Good job at keeping your structure and flow consistent; that's always a good thing as it makes it ...

I shall echo the opinions of the others; Wow! I think the shading that you've done on the lips is just great, although I think you could work with the ...

First off, I like the idea for this - I mean, it's a serious issue but I like how you've kind of put a playful edge to the tone of ...

This is pretty good. I struggled with it in some places, I must admit, but you have some good originality on your ideas you've used and the language that you've ...

This was good. Simple as. I loved it. I think that you had the right flow throughtout the entire poem - that is a hard thing to comeby; I find ...

;o Breaking Dawn as in the Cullen books? I haven't read that yet, but I cant wait until it comes out over here. I thought the rest of them were ...

I wonder where you are tonight, Mister Moon. The sky will never be so bright, Mister Moon. The clouds have covered you so tight, Mister Moon. Will you come back ...

This was such a touching book, that I just stumbled upon in the library. I scoured the rest of the library afterwards for his second teen fiction, Exchange which proved ...

Oooh, I got one word for this, matey; naiice. Okay, I dig the whole using the letters of the phrase for each line kind of pieces of work. I dont ...

Hm, this goofed around with my brain box a bit mainly because I'm not all that familiar with the modern free verse, so when I come across it I tend ...

I'm gonna crit the first one you posted, that way you have more info to use to improve your poem further, yes? :D Okay, first of all I'll point out ...

Hm, it's me, GingerLizzy! Some of you may remember me but I'm not quite sure. I forgot my password to my other account and it had been such a long ...