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  • General Fiction Novels
    Re: The Time Chamber. Chapter 1

    So the above reviewers have helpfully dealt with all the punctuation mistakes, understandable and mild enough. So let me get into the parts of the story that I liked. It ...

    Aug 22, 2011

  • Narrative Poetry
    Re: Alone

    Hey, this reminded me more of a song than a poem actually, because it was so emotive. You used language to create a really malleable atmosphere of sadness, I adored ...

    Aug 22, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Tèa

    Thanks so much for the reviews guys :3 It's called "Tèa" as that is the name of the main character, it's a Yugoslavian name :) I will definitely need to ...

    Aug 22, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: The Perfect, Passionate Love

    I thought this was super enjoyable. A few small things that the other reviewers have mentioned are right and could be improved to create a work even more readable and ...

    Aug 21, 2011

  • Dramatic Poetry
    Re: Lost

    This is really interesting, because it's so short, but it inspires so much emotion. I don't think it could be improved, it's succinct and perfect as it is. Enjoyable, intriguing ...

    Aug 21, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Tèa

    Spring evening, cool and deep blue, had settled, extending tentative tendrils of dusk upon the small town of Anytown. Blurred orange of sodium streetlights had begun to glow and though ...

    Aug 21, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Torn In Half

    Thank you guys for the reviews, much appreciated :) I'm going to go edit out all those insanely rambling sentences now :D And true about the characterization...hurmmmm, that will take ...

    Jul 31, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Chandler Alex Thomas

    Damn, your story made me cry on my laptop. Whoops. :P Seriously though, I have never been moved by a story to this extent before, and I'd like to thank ...

    Jul 14, 2011

  • Historical Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The Gentleman

    No problem, I meant it :)

    Jul 14, 2011

  • Romantic Novels
    Re: Heartbreak

    Wow, I like this. It felt so personal, I felt close to the protagonist. It had a really interesting point to make, and made it clearly. Description is something you ...

    Jul 14, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Dear Sergio.

    I really liked this. Sometimes we do need to express all the feelings we have for someone special (like he clearly is) and I think you expressed yours in a ...

    Jul 14, 2011

  • Historical Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The Gentleman

    This is really well-written, intriguing, has a lots of good technique. Things I enjoyed were: The metaphor, Mr. Grey, was well done. Sometimes these things turn out cliched or passe. ...

    Jul 14, 2011

  • Welcome Mat
    Re: Haii ^.^

    Thanks, SubjectBlue :) I'm sure I will ^.^

    Jul 14, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: That's Hot.

    OMG That's hilarious! *tears of laughter* :L :L Dude, such a funny story xD Mind if I stalk your page for more LOL-arious stories?? :P Niiice work :)

    Jul 14, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Torn In Half

    “I love you as certain dark things are to be loved, in secret, between the shadow and the soul.” “Even more so now,” she said, her voice reverberating where her ...

    Jul 14, 2011


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