Summerless

The part about black death seems overused to me and random. That's the only part I dislike. I love this part. Dancing on the rolling green hills, I haven't ever ...

Oh, I like this free verse poem! Everything in this poem is unique--I haven't read anything like this. I especially like this part: Self centered, obnoxious, insulting little comments spew ...

I agree with Demeter. She pointed out a few spelling errors. Self-esteem ends with e-s-t-e-e-m. Not a-s-t-e-e-m. You took away our friendship, You stole my self-asteem, You hurt me on ...

This was lovely. I like the rhyme scheme (A, A, B, B). The only comment I have is the punctuation. I think you have too much. You've captured my heart ...

First off that was a beautiful poem. I love the title. I chose to read this poem because, one, I saw it in the Featured Works thing in the front ...

I have to agree with Flame11. I couldn't exactly tell what the revenge was. Was it making Chad think that Calix and Eric were doing IT for an hour? Oh, ...

“So,” Eric broke the silence. I think that would be better as “So ... ” Eric broke the silence. "Eric broke the silence" doesn't sound much of a tag to ...

I liked this free verse poem a lot. It's a weak way to describe it but this poem that had erratic line breaks (or perhaps it only seems like to ...

That was, once again, really good. Just one thing on grammar. :] Chad burst in just then , “Hey, guys. I gotta go. I need to make an appointment with ...

Welcome to Young Writers Society. I agree with deafwriter_19 and SuicideKing. But enough with the rule-breaking business. I'll give you a review. I'm kind of a harsh reviewer so don't ...

Try reading books that are about pain or interview someone who experienced something wretched or agonizing. Have a friend who got hit in the face with a soccer ball? Have ...

Looks like scasha pointed out most of the critiques I was also thinking of. I love the start and end of this piece of writing. And I like how you ...

Welcome to Young Writers Society. This is an interesting poem. I, too, don't mind the negativity as long as it fits. And it does. Try condensing some of the lines, ...

I would delete the third and fourth stanzas altogether because they seem to be a plethora. An excess. Extraneous. For some reason they don't appeal to me because there aren't ...

This is a really weak poem, no offense. You tell the reader everything and there isn't a smooth transition from each stanza to the next one. I agree with deafwriter_19. ...