Summerless

Sonnets have a rhyme scheme of: A, B, A, B, C, D, C, D, E, F, E, F, G, G. And, as you already stated you know, they consist of ...

I love the imagery you put in. It was really vivid. The title doesn't seem so random now that I read the poem. One thing, though. Clots of fluorescent lights ...

There are quite a few typos and grammar errors as Vampy_Girl15 said. Midnight and all was quiet, go figure the one night I decided to volunter for my partner Jax ...

The one about kryptonite is cute. The pencil one is amusing. The others are okay. I can see how you incorporated the actual parts from Twilight. *thumbs up* As for ...

For the pixel house I only have one thing to say. Wow. As for the creature things, I like number two, style two best out of the four. All of ...

She sputters, pleading, “water.” That should be She sputters, pleading, “ W ater.” This (below), She cries, “help.” I think, would sound better if it was She cries, “ H ...

I agree with AmberAngst. Instead of "I'm so happy!" try putting some more feeling. "I'm so happy!" is one-sided. It's flat and a weak descriptive line. It was confusing at ...

I feel like that too, sometimes. These days I tend to get overwhelmed by my writing. I think to myself: I will never finish this. This sounds really cheesy. But ...

Thank you everyone for the compliments and critiques. Sol is Latin (and Spanish) for "sun." I will work on the last couplet at the end. ^ _ ~ Once again, ...

You hold good suspense and have great ideas but this is lacking a bit. First of all, John just whips out a piece of rope. Where did he get that ...

I like how you put "fleur-de-lys" in the beginning. The length is perfect. I agree with timjim77. Do not lengthen this poem. Only one comment. I think you should change ...

I love how you spaced the poem out. The places you put line breaks fit perfectly! You described the feelings so well and if I never had an anxiety attack ...

That was so funny. Seriously. People at my school don't say "gangsta," though. They have this thing where they say "gangSTAR" instead of gangsta or gangster. Back to your piece ...

I agree with RiDarling. This is a beautiful poem. I love where you put the line breaks. I never would have thought of putting there but you did, and it ...

This is pretty good except you forgot about the basics of dialogue. Each time a new person/animal/thing talks you are supposed to start a new paragraph. Example: "Hi," Blake said. ...