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Nice lines. I like how you used repetition to make a point. I also agree with uniaeca about the "will" instead of "well." Addicted to You is a great title.

Nice title. That was what drew me in to read your poem. I like the overall sound of it, but maybe consider a little bit of word arrangement in line ...

Hey, deafwriter, that was awesome. Maybe a little bit of an overuse with the word "sexy"--try seductive, alluring, foxy, luscious--but overall it was fine (for lack of a better word). ...

Hahaha, I'm reviewing your sonnet since you reviewed mine. First of all, it was humorous. I love the "meese" and "geese" part. I'm adding it to my imaginary dictionary. Sorry ...

This was a powerful piece. You described everything well and it fit the quiet, clandestine setting. This is definitely worth a gold star. I hope to read more of your ...

Crisp, the rising, is the suppressed sol, Bind seasons' promises compelled you to keep, Laugh, cerise lips, on the jade knoll, Slow over the fruitless, undulance of sleep. Beguile the ...

I love the style. It's quite creative and you keep the same style through out, which is good. I only have one critique. In line four you have "the pain ...

I think this is phenomenal, deafwriter_19! You used powerful vocabulary to describe Chester Matheson (by the way, I love the name!) like "emaciated" and "vulnerable," which made the reader understand ...

Secrets in Sun Lake Rules O1 Follow all the rules and guides of Young Writers Society. O2 Please refrain from control all aspects of the role-play :] O3 Minimal swearing. ...