Summerless

I'm still shaking away the reality. Reality that one day I'll look frantically for you, Searching wretchedly, yearning to persevere. I'm still wiping the tears. Tears that tear me apart ...

Strong starting sentence, good. Nice word choice (rendered, framing). Oh, and I really like the title.

Part two of "Wrong or Right" was more intriguing than part one. I like the word choice: risqué, entrapped, freelance, and shimmy.

Try capitalizing the first letter of the first word after each line break. The poem itself will look neater. Content-wise, that was phenomenal. Great job.

It's apologIZe, not apologise. “So you … going to come on to me or am I going to have to do it this time ? ” said Steve with much ...

Nice suspense build-up through dialogue. Don't forget to add a punctuation mark before the end quote. Example: "Yeah of course I am . " "Like no matter what ? " ...

I've never read anything about a gay teenage romance story, but this one was quite interesting and good. There were important details and none of the sentences were out of ...

I like how you related real books into Emily's diary/journal. Maybe a little bit of an overuse on "freaking"? Else than that this was great.

It does sound like it is from a girl's perspective so you pass :] I couldn't find any typos or grammatical errors. The voice is pretty strong. This is well ...

“God, I haven’t drank that much since the party of the defeat of Voldy-mort,” Ron staggered in Harry’s office. The black-haired man watched with amusement as his best mate slumped ...

CHAPTER TWO _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ Harry watched with faint amusement as Hermione was met with yet another invitation ...

I like the little intro thing you draw us all in with. I can totally relate myself to her. Everything is so cute and I like the reality of this. ...

Nice. Thanks for the smiley. You rock my socks off too. :] Just a few things. You don't need to have a comma in sentence two. And I thought Ron ...

“Good day, folks…” Harry Potter turned at the sound of his best friend’s voice. One eyebrow rose at the sight of the flame-haired Weasley swaying on the stage, the microphone ...

I, personally, like to read Twilight fanfiction in first person (probably because Stephenie Meyer wrote hers that way). It's pretty good except the fact that you are telling us everything. ...