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Really liked this!! Harsh but full of truth, i felt this poem needs nothing. Well done :)

A whisper of hope. Sullen cries of opportunity. The tool of my freedom is a knife. I will only be free when i am gone. I am trapped within my ...

Hi, i loved your poem, very unique and truthful. Spelling was brilliant so i have no criticism in that respect. The honey melts into my ears, flowing down my throat ...

I stared into the night sky and pondered life on earth. Why are we here? Who should we aim to please? In the end i guess it doesn't matter, we ...

Hi :) I liked this poem very much, i felt that i could really relate to it so it actually had meaning to me. I couldn't find any spelling/grammatical errors ...

Very nice work ShadowKnight :) I could not find any spelling mistakes so good job there :) I will say however, even though i enjoyed reading this piece, there was ...

Hi Laura :) I loved your prologue, and i adore your style of writing :) I only noticed a few spelling mistakes (Pong lol) so i wont go in to ...

Hi :) I loved your story, it had so many layers and twists, it was a treat to read :) I couldn't find many faults so i will try to ...

Morgan Grae was like any other boy in the sprawling city of Abalon, spending his days doing ordinary things ordinary children do, running, hiding, exploring. But little did Morgan know, ...

Boolovesyou made all the points worth making with her brilliant review :) So i am just gonna say - Very clever and thoughtful poem, hope to see you post more ...

Very nice poem, it created a very vivid image in my head and did not fail to give me a feeling not unlike happiness. I have no critism, bravo! :)

Its a very original poem, i have never seen one set out in such a... Timelined fashion, it works well, but i feel the paragraphs need more substance, and it ...

This poem is simply amazing, i personally think it is perfect so no criticism here :)

I agree with Boo, it needs more passion, instead of giving us the story and feeding it to us, let us sit down and feast to our hearts content. I ...

I get it, like Alice in wonderland from a different perspective? Very original idea :) For a prologue, i think this is perfect, not revealing too much information, but revealing ...