Streamfrost

thanks for the review! i will definitely keep some of these in mind for the upcoming chapters!!! thank you!!

We weaved through the thick-trunked oaks like snakes slinking through tall grass, neither us talking. We emerged from the shadowy depths of the forest a few minutes later, stepping into ...

I really liked this. It was kind of sad, and definitely made me feel of lost love. I agree with the fact that you should try and make this into ...

I absolutely LOVED them! They were all amazing! I agree with the above comments on the little grammatical corrects, however. But the imagery was phenominal! Personally, my favorite piece was ...

I liked this A LOT. Great piece of work. The only thing that I would suggest to work on would be rhythm. Just wasn't feeling it :/. My suggestion: see ...

I like this alot! It made me feel happy inside, like I too was reminiscing on my childhood :). Great job! What I especially liked was the fact that you ...

Yeah the italics thing is a good idea. I was worried about the sudden change of POV, and how people would react to it. Thanks for the input. I will ...

I really liked this Lofty. The amnesia thing is a great idea. If you were planning to do a novel with this, I would have her remember bits and pieces ...

Thanks! Yeah I'll fix thise errors! Thanks so much for the support! I'll check out your stories too! Thank you guys!

Nightfall Prologue The indigo night sky shone with the pewter gleam of stars, sheltering the scene unfolding beneath it. Among the shadowy depths of the moonlit clearing of a forest, ...

Thank you! Now that I think about it, "there" instead of "here" sounds a lot better. And no, unfortunately I don't yet. :( But my band and I hope to ...

You have a great start. Now all you need is to work on is word choice. Adding some new, more interesting words that allow the reader to really feel the ...

This was amazing. The introduction was phenominal! The grammar, however, was a little sketchy. I was confused when the text read "Never forget that I care about you, okay, baby ...

I really enjoyed this, but the rhythym could use some work. It was smooth in the beginning, but when you got to "the sky, which was once laughing" things got ...

I loved the rhyme scheme and the way the words flowed with a constant rhythym. The last line, however, should read "not till i die", rather than "not till I ...