StoryWeaver13

Running through the woods I could hear his laughter all around me. I think you should just start with "I could hear his laughter all around me." Then add the ...

Cool, I really like this, and I'm not the romantic-fiction kinda person. Honestly, though, I don't even have anything to really complain about. It was a good plot and I ...

First off, you have to work on the grammar and stuff a LOT, but that's okay, go through a couple times and you'll get all of that cleaned up. The ...

Do you care if I'm a little bit mean? Oh, I feel bad, but remember I'm only doing this because I think you have potential! BUT I don't think this ...

This is sad, but it was just a little weak...questions can do that to a poem. All the same, I think it was pretty relateable and emotional. One thing - ...

Chapter Three Jordan Lane’s expression was a comfort in one way, terrifying in another. His words confirmed what his face already said. “I think you’re onto something.” “But it’s far-fetch

I'm not sure if many people care about this, but there has been a big fall in the quality of television programs for young adults. I totally agree! My sister ...

Cool, I really like this! Being a tomboy who's always struggled between fitting in and "looking like a girl" and being myself, this was completely relateable to me. In a ...

Haha, I was pleasantly surprised! Your voice sounds really natural, and even though it's 3rd-person and neutral it has an edge of personality that molds to the characters just a ...

Well it seems a little angsty, but the fact that it's based off of something real means a lot. And we are "young writers," I suppose, so why not express ...

Corrections in red, suggestions/things to get rid of in bold. All I know , is you were there, the n you weren't. Dad, where did you go? You just left. ...

Just a little insight on what this is about- I saw a younger boy near the football fields. A couple dropout teens were gathered round, smoking and drinking. On my ...

Chapter Two Lane After a long mental war with myself I raced to the door, watching Jordan leave with an inferno's fire. Okay, okay, I admit it - I felt ...

Chapter One Jordan “I hate you!” Okay, so that was harsh. I could see the morally-winded look on Lane’s face, but was he anywhere near breaking point? Of course not. ...

Well, think - what scares you? Open up the creaking door into that dark and dank room in your mind. In my opinion, villains are more terrifying when they 1) ...