Stori

Hi. I just had one little concern here. You tend to order sentences, "While doing this, I did that." Check the fourth paragraph. I believe it ought to be "rang" ...

Graymoon: A breeze flitted through the forest, carrying many scents. "Prey animals, rain on the way..." Foxcloud stiffened suddenly. "What is it?" I asked, concerned. Instead of answering, she bounded

I read 'em.

Time: 2:00 PM. When I was typing a reply, the cursor dropped to the next line at a certain point. I'm not sure what it is, but this was in ...

Thanks, Esther. Littlestorm is original, and so are the others. "Did some cat mention prey?" asked the newcomer. "I certainly did. Your name?" "Dragpaw." StarClan, was that the best name ...

Hi Morgan. I just wanted to let you know you have an extraordinary poem here.

Hello Forest, here I am. the words were out of my mouth before I could stop them. Don't forget to capitalize "the." In the second paragraph, I just think you ...

Thanks Sir Knight.

Mintpaw "You three go ahead. I'm going to wait for Storm." The other members of the patrol stared at me like I'd grown a fifth paw. As always, I looked ...

Hi Aless, thought I'd help you out. In the first sentence, you forgot to put in an end mark. Then in the last sentence before the main text you missed ...

Hey, Dakota! I found a few errors here. The night was young but cold, the last rays of the sun had disappeared only an hour ago, yet it was pitch ...

*chuckles* Would you like some critique now? Central Ohio’s best real estate agent, Commas tend to travel in pairs, you know. I picked the paper up and unravelll it. Change ...

Littlestorm “Well, here we are.” My mentor pointed with his nose toward a pile of fallen rocks. “There’s a crack in there that widens out. You’ll sleep there.” “I certainly ...

Who's should be Whose, you know. :)

Thanks, Evi. I believe Foracker is Sam's last name. :smt004