Stori

As a matter of fact, I've been letting this story collect dust. I'll do my best to polish this up and add more.

Thornkit "So, we're supposed to... save the forest?" Smallkit nodded, her eyes shining. When no cat spoke, she looked a little put out. "It isn't that we doubt you..." Stonekit ...

Hi there, Dark. Something I'd like to point out: a lot of the narration here sounds like Jake. For instance, I hadn’t meant to be bad, but I guess that’s ...

Alex "Odd mice, to be sure... Come on, Rei. Let's get this stuff put away." No reply. He looked around, and finally spotted her beside a young sparrow. She was ...

Antonio started,” Make sure you fix that quotation mark. Good story.

so I’m off to have my hamburger and my box of chips and ketchup Usually people don't list what they're having for lunch. If you want to say what she's ...

Name: Thornkit Gender: tom Personality: He tends to be blunt with cats he doesn't know, but with his friends he's a different story. Likes to play, and curious about other ...

Alex "I'll bet you a coin that stew's Celine's doing." Reisa said nothing, though her smile widened with the first sip. She pointed to the clock on one wall. "Yes, ...

Name: Alex Age (mouse years) 12 Gender: male Personality: Honest and forthright, Alex speaks his mind and considers himself a "gentlemouse". Appearance: Light gray with a sooty nose. Long, curling ...

It generally isn't polite to us all capital letters. “I’m getting good to go reports from the mechanical engineers, the scientist s

Shouldn't we discuss the plot here?

Lord Owling, the despised overlord and lover of crossword puzzles. has escaped. However, his influence is far from cleansed... Our heroes won at a terrible cost. Sky is in a ...

You still tend to refer to Gray as "him" sometimes, "it" other times.

Just wondering, Esther. Do the characters have names?

Hi Kara. I just spotted one error in the story. patch relations with the them? Just go ahead and remove "the".